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1. Should mention those who are over their time.
2. Dress nicer.
3. Be careful when you introdice others, you may think it's funny to say so, they might not think so. Would be better to reconfirm with them or maybe tell them at the very beginning that it's gonna be their introduction.
Keep up, and stay after the meeting.
Roy, you really don't need to rush back.
2009年2月17日 星期二
2009年2月3日 星期二
C3: Get to the point.
Received suggestions:
Special thanks to Mandy for her great suggestions. :)
Mandy:
Here are two of my humble suggestions for your reference. First of all, I think it's better to say "Toastmaster." instead of "Thank you." in the end of the speech because it's you that are to be thanked by the audience for you give them such a wonderful speech. Secondly, I suggest you explain it more detailedly how to put this simple but powerful life philosophy into practice in the daily life because you can't expect everyone exactly get your point. They might not fully understand what the true meaning of this saying is. You'd better get them an example and make it even clearer.
Chang:
Cause deeds speak louder than words, we need more results to convince the audience the power of the philosophy, except for passing entrance exams and delivering speeches.
Ben:
Need to improve speech writing.
Try to paraphrase the sentences and try to shorten the article.
Need to hone writing skills and make the article more consice and punchy.
----Script----
Good evening, ladies and gentlemen.
Today I would love to talk about the most important philosophy of life I learned from my father that has brought me all the way to where I am today. From a suburb farming-county boy to national college researcher is certainly no way short. What is that? “Focus on solution; not problem.” Looking back, I would say that’s the most vital life-supporting concept I learned from my father.
When I was in junior high, things were very different from what I am now. People say that adolescence brings wildness and rebellion. That’s certainly true to me. My mother was a teacher in my junior high school, and as the place where I lived was a pretty small town, it’s natural that she knew almost all the teachers in my elementary school, too. All those rules, disciplines, regulations, and supervision all escalated to a tide, pushed me all the way to the border of extreme insanity. I stole things in stores and almost got sent to the police station, rode with my friends on burning wheels through those nights of summer sweats and winter chills, and cheated in almost all the exams and slept through most classes.
Those days were like dreams in the night. Dreams, however, being good ones or nightmares, would vanish as daybreak shines the earth again. To me, the daybreak came at the last moment, not too soon, not too late, exactly in the last semester in my junior high.
It was another ordinary day of boring school, but as I got home, there was something strange. I saw my mother sitting on the sofa crying. Seeing tears on my mother’s face was a common scene back then, but that day was different. Even when I was on the third floor, it seemed to me that I could sense her tears dripping down her cheeks on the first floor. Her sobbing sounded so sad and desperate that I found it impossible to ignore. Not knowing what to do and say, I kept waiting until my father came back from work. After a while, I heard footsteps coming up through the stairs. I was so eager to know what happened to my mom even it might be the severest punishment or scolding that awaited me. Things turned out to be that she overheard some teachers discussing their sons and daughters after school. They mocked me for they think I could never make it in senior high entrance exam. All the pressure and worries for my mom in those years erupted on that day, breaking her down, and surely I was to blame.
Strange enough, my father did not scold me again. He just sat down on another desk and started writing something. I was so afraid that I could only wait there, holding the textbook in my hand without being able to read anything in. Few minutes later, he put something on my desk and walked down the stairs. It was a beautifully calligraphed letter. It said: “My son. Those who succeed find solutions; those who fail find excuses. The key to success is not luck, nor talent, but ambitions. Those who want to succeed would collect all accessible resources, use all possible means, and show undefeatable determination. Set up your goals and follow it closely, you’ll be on your way to success. By your father.”
That surely wasn’t a long letter, but that was the first time I was convinced that small and simple things could also have great power. Just like the plot you may have watched or read on TV or in novel, I changed on the very evening. One thing was different from those soap operas’ storylines: things didn’t go too smooth for me at once. Wasted time left a giant gap of knowledge for me to fill in, and I have to work really hard to make it up. Not having confidence in myself at all, I kept asking my father everyday what I should do should I fail. After having done so for a few times, I was invited me to sit with him. He said: “It’s very natural to be nervous and anxious especially when the future seems so uncertain. However, instead of using your time on thinking about what you should do after you fail, I would suggest you use you time to study more and get more scores. Focus on solutions; not problem. We will discuss when you get your final result. Okay?”
It may sound small and simple, but as I said before, small and simple things could also have great power. From that moment, whenever I face challenges, like any big exams or standing up on the stage and deliver speeches, I stopped all my worries and anxiety, and only focused on what I want to happen. I believe in this era of turbulence, we are all facing different challenges in various aspects, at many times. It’s my sincere wish that we can all try to focus on solutions, not problems. Give it a try! It helped me turn a whole new leaf a decade ago, and now, I know it could help us to pave another grand new path. Ladies and gentlemen, when facing unknown challenges and uncertain future, let’s focus on solutions, not problem. Thank you!
Special thanks to Mandy for her great suggestions. :)
Mandy:
Here are two of my humble suggestions for your reference. First of all, I think it's better to say "Toastmaster." instead of "Thank you." in the end of the speech because it's you that are to be thanked by the audience for you give them such a wonderful speech. Secondly, I suggest you explain it more detailedly how to put this simple but powerful life philosophy into practice in the daily life because you can't expect everyone exactly get your point. They might not fully understand what the true meaning of this saying is. You'd better get them an example and make it even clearer.
Chang:
Cause deeds speak louder than words, we need more results to convince the audience the power of the philosophy, except for passing entrance exams and delivering speeches.
Ben:
Need to improve speech writing.
Try to paraphrase the sentences and try to shorten the article.
Need to hone writing skills and make the article more consice and punchy.
----Script----
Good evening, ladies and gentlemen.
Today I would love to talk about the most important philosophy of life I learned from my father that has brought me all the way to where I am today. From a suburb farming-county boy to national college researcher is certainly no way short. What is that? “Focus on solution; not problem.” Looking back, I would say that’s the most vital life-supporting concept I learned from my father.
When I was in junior high, things were very different from what I am now. People say that adolescence brings wildness and rebellion. That’s certainly true to me. My mother was a teacher in my junior high school, and as the place where I lived was a pretty small town, it’s natural that she knew almost all the teachers in my elementary school, too. All those rules, disciplines, regulations, and supervision all escalated to a tide, pushed me all the way to the border of extreme insanity. I stole things in stores and almost got sent to the police station, rode with my friends on burning wheels through those nights of summer sweats and winter chills, and cheated in almost all the exams and slept through most classes.
Those days were like dreams in the night. Dreams, however, being good ones or nightmares, would vanish as daybreak shines the earth again. To me, the daybreak came at the last moment, not too soon, not too late, exactly in the last semester in my junior high.
It was another ordinary day of boring school, but as I got home, there was something strange. I saw my mother sitting on the sofa crying. Seeing tears on my mother’s face was a common scene back then, but that day was different. Even when I was on the third floor, it seemed to me that I could sense her tears dripping down her cheeks on the first floor. Her sobbing sounded so sad and desperate that I found it impossible to ignore. Not knowing what to do and say, I kept waiting until my father came back from work. After a while, I heard footsteps coming up through the stairs. I was so eager to know what happened to my mom even it might be the severest punishment or scolding that awaited me. Things turned out to be that she overheard some teachers discussing their sons and daughters after school. They mocked me for they think I could never make it in senior high entrance exam. All the pressure and worries for my mom in those years erupted on that day, breaking her down, and surely I was to blame.
Strange enough, my father did not scold me again. He just sat down on another desk and started writing something. I was so afraid that I could only wait there, holding the textbook in my hand without being able to read anything in. Few minutes later, he put something on my desk and walked down the stairs. It was a beautifully calligraphed letter. It said: “My son. Those who succeed find solutions; those who fail find excuses. The key to success is not luck, nor talent, but ambitions. Those who want to succeed would collect all accessible resources, use all possible means, and show undefeatable determination. Set up your goals and follow it closely, you’ll be on your way to success. By your father.”
That surely wasn’t a long letter, but that was the first time I was convinced that small and simple things could also have great power. Just like the plot you may have watched or read on TV or in novel, I changed on the very evening. One thing was different from those soap operas’ storylines: things didn’t go too smooth for me at once. Wasted time left a giant gap of knowledge for me to fill in, and I have to work really hard to make it up. Not having confidence in myself at all, I kept asking my father everyday what I should do should I fail. After having done so for a few times, I was invited me to sit with him. He said: “It’s very natural to be nervous and anxious especially when the future seems so uncertain. However, instead of using your time on thinking about what you should do after you fail, I would suggest you use you time to study more and get more scores. Focus on solutions; not problem. We will discuss when you get your final result. Okay?”
It may sound small and simple, but as I said before, small and simple things could also have great power. From that moment, whenever I face challenges, like any big exams or standing up on the stage and deliver speeches, I stopped all my worries and anxiety, and only focused on what I want to happen. I believe in this era of turbulence, we are all facing different challenges in various aspects, at many times. It’s my sincere wish that we can all try to focus on solutions, not problems. Give it a try! It helped me turn a whole new leaf a decade ago, and now, I know it could help us to pave another grand new path. Ladies and gentlemen, when facing unknown challenges and uncertain future, let’s focus on solutions, not problem. Thank you!
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